Sailor Weyris « Thread Started on Oct 6, 2009, 11:17pm »
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Name: Ryuu Bai (True name is Akane Ayame) Gender: Female Age: 2,100, but appears to be around 16 in earth years Birthday: June 16th Birthplace: The Planet Weyris, in the Pegasi Galaxy some 2000 Light years away.
Physical description: Standing at a somewhat tiny height of only four feet ten inches, Ryuu gives the impression of a china doll with delicate features and wide child-like eyes. Her face is vaguely heart-shaped with a pair of amazing golden optics that seem slightly dulled and dark, but have an occasional sparkle in them. Her hair is relatively thick, coming down in soft crimson waves to mid-back. She is slightly curvy, but does not have an overly hourglass figure, she has soft curves, right for her height. Arms are slightly thin, but are strong, not weak.
Clothing is basic, a top (Usually a tank top or a t-shirt) various colors and usually emblazoned with numerous phrases or pictures(Usually angels or 'spiritual' images). Jewelry is next to non-existant with only a mere red satin choker adorning her neck. Bottom is usually adorned with jeans or various sizes of skirts (From ankle-length to miniskirt) Ryuu has a wide range of style, usually edging towards punkish schoolgirl if you wish for me to put it in words.
Personality: ( Loyal to a fault, Ryuu will never, EVER betray her friends, the few that she has, that have come to accept her. Quiet, and somewhat un-talkative if she is uncertain, Ryuu doesn't stand out much. Though, once you get her talking, you will notice she is quite truthful, but will not go so far as to hurt someone with the truth. She will on occasion, tell a little white lie in order to protect people's feelings but this does not happen unless she absolutely needs to.
History: Born on planet Weyris in the Grand Palace, Ryuu had trouble developing a little from the start. All Weyrians are born with wings. However, Ryuu's were severely undeveloped,she had red hair, and she was shorter than the average 5-6 feet of her people, and she only formed small nubs with a easily breakable membrane and red hair. This was a huge disappointment in the entire kingdom, and in the Pegasi system itself. She was denounced as Princess, and exiled for her imperfection. She lived on the other side of the planet, where the other imperfect weyrians lived..though...she was the only one. Living in solitude for most of her life, Akane began training at the age of six. (Weyrians mature physically faster and stop aging completely at sixteen) Living off the sparse wildlife that was there, Ryuu began going feral, untamed and completely wild, she was visited by a dream that she was a chosen Weyrian. When she awoke, a pearl bracelet was on her left hand, and words formed in her head. She shouted these words to nothingness, and henshined into Sailor Weyris. The FIRST Sailor Weyris ever to be denounced as a princess. A message came to her once again, and she was to head to Freya,. Uncertain of how to get there, she concentrated fully on her destination and the words "Weyris Teleport" Came into her mind. Shouting these two words out, a silver-grey bubble encased her and shot her off towards Freya. She has recently arrived upon this planet after 2000 lightyears of travel with occasional stops on planets to rest so she could keep going.
Celestial object represented: Planet Weyris, 1,000 lightyears away. Senshi Level: Super Fuku description: Tiara: No Tiara, just a deep green stone on her forehead with silvery wings on either side. Collar/Broach: Collar is that of a dark grey, with no stripes, just a solid grey collar. Broach is circular with a cursive W emblazoned in gold. Choker: Her choker has a small ring of pearls around it to represent her bracelet. Bodice/Sleeves: A one-piece white fuku, with a crescent moon-shape cut out of the bodice around her belly button. No Sleeves Skirt: Skirt is a light cloud-grey, single-layered with a strip of silver grey at the bottom of the skirt. Back Bow: Back bow is the same color as her collar, a dark, storm grey. The tails of the bow reach about an inch above her knees, they are transluscent, both the top and bottom of the bow. Front bow: Same as the back bow. Gloves: Gloves are fingerless and elbow-length, which have a grey border around it Shoes: Boots are white, and knee-high, with a single gold bow at the top of it, the top of the boot coming straight across her knee.
Henshin phrase and sequence:
"Weyris Iridescent Power..MAKE UP!" After calling out her henshin phrase, her bracelet flashes brightly, and shoots up into the air, spinning rapidly clockwise. Ryuu's now shining silvery form spins counter-clockwise and tiny pearl drops rain down, her bodice forms first, and a bright white puddle forms under her feet, and ribbons shoot up from the puddle, molding onto her feet and in a momentary sparkle of gold, her white boots with the gold ribbons atop them appear. The 'puddle' then forms into a shining silvery ring and slowly moves upwards, and the thin ring clings to her waist, the puffed white belt and the light silver skirt appearing with a single darker grey stripe drawing itself onto the bottom, leaving an inch of lighter grey under it. In a whirl of pearl droplets, her translucent back bow appears.
She raises her hands to the sky, and her pearl bracelet flashes, and her white fingerless gloves with a single puff of rolled fabric at her elbows appear. Her hair turns a deep cranberry color. The collar appears, then her choker, in a final flash of light, her tiara and brooch appear, with the front bow exploding out of the brooch. She takes a stance, with one foot behind the other and her pointed staff in her hands.The pearls on her choker shining as a cursive W appears in the background.
Power(s): Dragon's Rage: Raising a hand to the sky, she calls this out. The sky above her goes dark, and a dragon-shaped cloud starts forming, the dragon is not real, just a manifistation of energy and a powerful one at that. This attack is as powerful as Weyris's heart, if she feels weak, the attack will do nothing, however, if she feels confident, the attack will be powerful. the dragon is that in the shape of a chinese dragon, with whiskers and no wings. It charges downwards from the cloud, galloping towards it's target. It can be large, or rather small, depending on Weyris's heart strength. It bites viciously down on it's target, weakening it.
Embrace of the Weyr!: Spinning her staff, the spear-end begins glowing with an odd silver-blue light. She jumps into the air, and does a complete 360 spin, and points the pointed end at her enemy and a long thin whip-like energy shoots out from the pointed end, and wraps around her enemy. The energy tightens around her opponent, squeezing it until it is rendered breathless or cut in half. A bit of a violent attack, Weyris rarely uses this one.
Weapon(s): Draconic Tail Spear: This spear, is a simple silver weapon. At the top of the staff, is a sharp point, like that of a knife. A thin golden dragon curls around the staff, it's head at the point of the spear, and 'spitting out' the staff. On the bottom end of the staff, is a small orb, in which bloodenergy is collected. If Weyris manages to attack 3 or more targets and draws blood, this transluscent white orb will fill with red, and she can shoot powerful blasts of energy out of the point of the spear. Special/magical item(s):
Henshin Bracelet: A pearl bead bracelet, backed with silver, she uses this to henshin. In her senshi form, it appears on her neck like a choker.
RP Sample: The sky was clear, a deep blue hue, with soft cottony white clouds. The area was Juuban Park, a place where a lot of the battles seemed to happen. On this particular day, the sunshine dissapeared momentarily, replaced by dark silver-grey clouds, and cloudy silver orb appeared out of it slowly, like a drop of water from the tap. A few people glanced upwards in surprise at the sudden change of weather. However, the orb was what surprised them. Inside, was the silhouette of a girl, she was curled in the fetal position, exausted from her travels. The orb gently floated down to the ground, hovering about a foot from the grass.
It waited there, as if awaiting a friend or someone to approach the orb and awaken the figure within. The clouds cleared, leaving the sky once again blue, with fluffy white clouds. The birds had gone silent during this..drop, and had resumed singing. Citizens approached the orb, cautiously poking at it, but nothing happened. Losing interest quickly, people would stay for only a few minutes before moving on with their day.
Sailor Weyris had arrived to her destination. She had no idea, she was locked in sleep, exausted from travelling so far. Curling up tighter, she hugged her knees in her sleep, her crimson tresses sheilding her face.
Re: Sailor Weyris « Reply #1 on Oct 7, 2009, 5:00am »
Make sure you've done all the required reading; I can already tell there are some things you seem to have missed.
Asian-ish names are assumed to be in Eastern form, so if you mean her given name to be Ryuu, you have it backwards. I don't wanna have to do the thing we did on CI with the family names in all caps so people don't get confused, so I really prefer people follow the standard naming formulas set forth in the required reading. Also, I know all three Lights have the same given name and there are two charas named Tsukino Usagi in the canon, but let's not create more of that confusion here. We already have an Akane on the site.
The eye description is just strange. I much prefer straightforward descriptions in profiles-- just the facts, presented simply, for reference's sake. If you wanna describe that way IC. . . well, other than the fact I might spork my eyes out, you're fine. . . just not in profiles. Each shirt has numerous images and phrases? And you do know this is a text-based RPG, right? Of course you're supposed to put things into words . No need to even question about that!
Your personality section is four sentences long and not very informative. I'd prefer you beef it up and add more depth.
The history section really needs overhauling. The story of her past is very Sue-ish, I'm afraid. It would also be helpful that if you're attempting to create an unfamiliar race of people with odd appearances and customs, that you flesh them out. Also, there was no mention of vestigial wings in the appearance, which I would've thought would be an important detail that wouldn't be overlooked.
There's inconsistency in the stated distance to your chara's homeworld. And now you have me wondering whether the Pegasus Galaxy exists outside the "Stargate" fandom, but I'm too tired to look it up -_- .
Please refer to the thread about Senshi Levels and label it properly. Also, be sure that if she's more than a newbie Senshi, you justify the level with a proportionate amount of time and fighting experience as a Senshi.
Descriptions are never to be written as lists. Make sure you describe her fuku in proper sentence and paragraph format. Be careful you don't make it too much like Sol Senshi fuku, also, since your chara is not a Sol Senshi. Be creative with it and remember that the only true requirement is that it have a Sailor Collar.
There is also no need for a Sol-style henshin phrase, since your chara is not a Sol Senshi. We have a diversity of henshin phrases here, as well as charas who don't really need one at all. Again, creativity is encouraged. As the sequence goes, don't forget to revise it if you revise the fuku so it will match.
She must have a very small neck if her bracelet can double as a choker O_o . *banishes mental images and blames the late hour/lack of sleep*
The RP sample has to be applicable to this game universe. This one was so clearly meant for another game I didn't even bother reading over it. A new one will have to be done.
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